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One sip is all it takes, to deligate our saints.

After all our fates, with Heaven or Hades, but I say,

Two sips it may take,
to make this world quake, make our spirits forsake,
all our vows we undertake.

But to shine light on the way,

Three sips it takes,

Making night into day, make April into May.
Spring chaos forth, in our gluttonous wake.

It takes only one to pray,

for the foolish, near sighted one not to partake.
For a pretty fun contest actually. [link] And of course like it mentioned, I promise to watch and llama who ever shall win, cross my heart, hope to die, and if I may, let angels cry.
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Student Writer
I love the wording!
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yey! I liked the ending to yours very much actually.
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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jrobbins Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
I like the sense that it may pertain to several things; more specifically, religion and spirituality.

Well done!
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you!
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jrobbins Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
You're very welcome!
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KayleeRydder Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow, this is really beauitful, if you do not mind me sayin'
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Of course I don't, thank you.
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Vvlad-vVolfen Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Interesting, I've been contemplating it these last minutes, it's full of meaning but not to any exact conclusion I've found. Perhaps it will find meaning with further thought. All I can say is one sip seems better than none, yet far better than more.
All good things with Temperance, and moderation, I guess is what this speaks to me in the moment.
Out standing, this is worth more than a fav stood on it concept alone. It has true meaning that can only be found by those that hold them selves still for a moment to contemplate it. Something dA is not fond of. Bravo. :winner:
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's one insane complimentary feedback, if all my messages were this deep I'd feel special, but regardless your analysis of my poem (I did while I was half awake) is very kind thank you. And too be honest I don't know if I should feel bad, sometimes the themes or motive of my poems I don't think of, I just write and it forms things. I don't mean by random though...
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