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One sip is all it takes, to deligate our saints.

After all our fates, with Heaven or Hades, but I say,

Two sips it may take,
to make this world quake, make our spirits forsake,
all our vows we undertake.

But to shine light on the way,

Three sips it takes,

Making night into day, make April into May.
Spring chaos forth, in our gluttonous wake.

It takes only one to pray,

for the foolish, near sighted one not to partake.
For a pretty fun contest actually. [link] And of course like it mentioned, I promise to watch and llama who ever shall win, cross my heart, hope to die, and if I may, let angels cry.
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Student Writer
I love the wording!
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yey! I liked the ending to yours very much actually.
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IsleintheSkye Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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jrobbins Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
I like the sense that it may pertain to several things; more specifically, religion and spirituality.

Well done!
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you!
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jrobbins Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
You're very welcome!
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KayleeRydder Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow, this is really beauitful, if you do not mind me sayin'
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Of course I don't, thank you.
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Vvlad-vVolfen Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Interesting, I've been contemplating it these last minutes, it's full of meaning but not to any exact conclusion I've found. Perhaps it will find meaning with further thought. All I can say is one sip seems better than none, yet far better than more.
All good things with Temperance, and moderation, I guess is what this speaks to me in the moment.
Out standing, this is worth more than a fav stood on it concept alone. It has true meaning that can only be found by those that hold them selves still for a moment to contemplate it. Something dA is not fond of. Bravo. :winner:
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's one insane complimentary feedback, if all my messages were this deep I'd feel special, but regardless your analysis of my poem (I did while I was half awake) is very kind thank you. And too be honest I don't know if I should feel bad, sometimes the themes or motive of my poems I don't think of, I just write and it forms things. I don't mean by random though...
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Vvlad-vVolfen Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I suspected it was random selected words, but sought out meaning none the less. Historically authors dont always find the meaning their viewers do it their own works. Art is subjective to your own point of view, and I find I enjoy few things so much as to be surprised by my own art in the eyes of a thoughtful critic.
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
that's usually how I write, I just spin a web of what ever then read it over and find meaning to it, then repair some lines if need
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Vvlad-vVolfen Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It seems to work what ever you're doing, so dont change except to select a bigger hammer to hit it with.:D
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Student Writer
Wonderful. :D
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thankies
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Student Writer
No problem. :)
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Maclafel7 Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice :)
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you, I wrote this working ten hour days on a farm so it's not my best lol...oh well that's what I get for posting things when i'm half undead wait..that made no sense
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Maclafel7 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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QuirkyBrainiac Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely work, yet again!
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
well I came as a honorable metnion for that contest :I I guess I should be remotly happy
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QuirkyBrainiac Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*huggle*
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Lovely comment yet again
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QuirkyBrainiac Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:blushes: Shucks...
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
yesh, I have yet to see something from you. Have you done anything new
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QuirkyBrainiac Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
im writing the description for one now. why the near constant push for something new?
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Why the defense? I'm just asking, and I like your work. I feel bad for you looking and commenting on mine without me enjoying yours.
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QuirkyBrainiac Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sorry to snap at you :( I do appreciate the time you give to look and comment, and I guess a small bit feels good that someone's actually asking for more... I don't want you to feel bad for me looking and commenting; I'm a giver, not a receiver :) And you can always look at my past submissions, if you haven't already :P
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Well i'll still wait until you make more, but yes in time when i'm not dead from work i'll look at your old stuff
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