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Make your poem suffer,
it needs to know how you feel.

And if it doesn't, your poem is ignorant.

Gouge the pen deep within it, until bloody ink stains through.
Write very hard
so your poem can feel your scars.

If you crinkle the corners,
good;
it needs to have broken tattered bones.
Feeling exhausted before your done.

Do not share or post your poem so soon,
for it needs to feel rejection.

Most important, before it dies.

Never..

Clean it's wounds, or tape its rips,
do no accept forgiveness..

As your poem dies, you'll be surprised.

Your dead withered poem,
has found
new life.
Never say sorry
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Whisper-sylvya Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Student Writer
This is an amazing piece. I've always firmly believed that poetry about pain is the most honest, because it is one of the strongest emotions. Truly beautiful. 
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Love is the counter part to this emotion, it inspires a lot of writing even though it may be gooey and whimsical. But thank you, tends to be when I write very well. 
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Whisper-sylvya Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student Writer
I definitely agree. It's amazing. :)
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iMariposa Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow . . . this was beautiful! 
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you very much
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love it all except the 

"Never..

Clean it's wounds, or tape its rips, 
do no accept forgiveness.."

For a time is fine, it's in design,
but soon you'll find, a broken line.

To be forgiven, you must forgive.
You must not live in, "live let live."

Or "one" will surely "die" my friend.

:(
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Actually my emotions are displayed in an abstract manner, I believe in forgiveness always. If I would have not forgiven certain people in my life I'd be like most people that choose that path, and that is hurt and cold, only hurting others. I have learned this over time, that if those that didn't accept me who move on in life, do the same to others. 

I forgive others, not my emotions for they can be irrational or rational, they only reflect my mistakes. When you read my work i'm sorry if you'll be perplexed my writing can mean how i'm feeling, not how i'm feeling or have nothing to do with my beliefs at all. Not sure why I write like so.
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Forgive me then if I seem preachy, but as one who has been filled with the love of Christ and His Holy Spirit, I can't help but impart a view on life that many never seem to grasp. Living in "two dimensions" walking in the "will of one's own heart" and allowing that to supersede your own emotions. I only know, because it's happen to me before. Until I decided to let go of my heart, where it should have been in the first place.

In the Hands of my Father in Heaven. :)

All things though. Because if it never happened....   

Then I wouldn't be imparting this to you my friend. ;)
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Iv'e already done what you have told me really. My heart is with who it belongs with most but it does not mean in a lesser meaning my heart can belong to others, just not in a spiritual way just a way of principle 
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Fair Enough. Fair well.
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